2016考研英語(yǔ)書信作文：這里有你努力的方向！

　　摘要：本文列舉了各個(gè)分?jǐn)?shù)段的英語(yǔ)書信作文。你可以首先對(duì)照范文給自己的文章打分，然后根據(jù)老師的修改意見明確自己的修改方向、努力方向。

　　?0-4分
　　?第一篇
　　Dear Elle,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you gave me help at the school party last Sunday. If it had not been for your assistance in you lend me your beautiful dress, I fear that I would have been appearing in once a year campus dancing party.
　　Everyone agrees that it was you who generously offered dress to me. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                      Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                              Li Ming
　　修改意見：
　　Dear Elle,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you gave me help(for 后面不能加句子，可改為your help) at the school party last Sunday. If it had not been for your assistance in you lend(改為 lending) me your beautiful dress, I fear that I would (加 not)have been appearing (appeared)in(改為at) once a year (可以用一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句來(lái)修飾，此處刪掉)campus dancing party(加上 ,which is held only once every year ).
　　Every one agrees that it was you who generously offered(加the ) dress to me. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                     Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                           Li Ming
　　2分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：第一段的最后一句話中，由于沒有寫not，使文章的意思完全相反，因此，一定要好好研究一下虛擬語(yǔ)氣的用法。另外，for 后面是不能加句子的。

　　?第二篇
　　Dear Bob,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you to help me to improve my English during these days. If it had not been for your assistance in teaching me various knowledge including the culture of English, Then help me to practice English face to face, I fear that I would have been seek to the way of learning English for a long time without your help.
　　Everyone agrees that it was you who are warmly and likely to help others without the pay. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　修改意見：
　　Dear Bob,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for you to help me to improve my English during these days. If it had not been for your assistance in teaching me various knowledge including the culture of English, Then(刪除) help(改為helping) me to practice English face to face, I fear that I would have been seek(改為seeking) to the way of learning English for a long time without your help.(刪除)
　　Every one agrees that it was you who are warmly and likely(likely 是很可能的意思)to help others without the pay(it was …who..是強(qiáng)調(diào)句，此句可以改為，it was you who are so warmly to help others for free). Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　4分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：寫完書信要有yours sincerely 和你的名字。英語(yǔ)的句號(hào)是.此外，建議你看一下關(guān)于強(qiáng)調(diào)句和虛擬語(yǔ)氣的知識(shí)。

　　?第三篇
　　Dear Bob,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for the help you give me about learning English. If it had not been for your assistance in a variety of activities including holding funny discussions with me, teaching me singing English songs, playing simple English games, and so on, I fear that I would have been searching a wrong and difficult way to learn English and feeling unhappy to learn it.
　　Every one agrees that it was you who give me many opportunities to speak English loudly, beacuse you know that I am so shy to talk with others by English. Your help raise my level of proficiency in English, and now I enjoy greatest interst in English both listening and writing.
　　Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                 Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                       Li Ming
　　修改意見：
　　Dear Bob,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for the help you give(改為gave) me about learning English. If it had not been for your assistance in (in 后面要加doing sth.)a variety of activities including(刪除) holding funny discussions with me, teaching me singing English songs,(加and) playing simple English games, and so on(刪除), I fear that I would have been searching(改為going) a wrong and difficult way to learn English and feeling unhappy to learn it(刪除).
　　Every one agrees that it was you who give(改為gave) me many opportunities to speak English loudly, (改為.because 首字母大寫)beacuse(拼寫錯(cuò)誤，改為because) you know that I am so shy to talk with others by(改為in) English. Your help raise my level of proficiency(中式英語(yǔ)) in English, and now I enjoy ( have)greatest (改為great)interst(拼寫錯(cuò)誤interest) in English both listening and writing.
　　Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                         Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                                Li Ming
　　3分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)與后面的單詞之間空一格。嘆號(hào)后面的第一個(gè)單詞首字母也要大寫。單詞拼寫的錯(cuò)誤盡量避免。建議你好好學(xué)習(xí)一下有關(guān)虛擬語(yǔ)氣的知識(shí)點(diǎn)，多讀一些英語(yǔ)文章，可有效杜絕中式英語(yǔ)。

　　?第四篇
　　Dear Bob,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm help in the process of my seeking job conformed to my past decades training, after i graduated from peking university.
　　If it had not been for your assistance in recommendation to the prestigious company in China. i fear that i would have been on the job road back and forth .i really appreciate this precious opportunity ,which you offered. every one agrees that it was you who wrote a letter to the esteemed company boss, regarding as my qualifications ,education back –ground ,and my special skills at computer program which i have a huge intrest in. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! please accept my gratitude.
　　修改意見：
　　Dear Bob,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your warm help in the process of my(刪除my) seeking job conformed to my past decades training, after i(大寫)graduated from peking university(兩個(gè)單詞的首字母大寫).
　　If it had not been for your assistance in recommendation (改為recommending)to the prestigious company in China. i(大寫)fear that i would have been on the job road (中式英語(yǔ))back and forth .i really appreciate this precious oppotunity(拼寫錯(cuò)誤opportunity) which you offered. every one(首字母大寫) agrees that it was you who wrote a letter to the esteemed company(刪除) boss, regarding as(刪除) my qualifications ,education back –ground ,and my special skills at computer program which i have a huge intrest in(刪除). Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! please(首字母大寫)accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                           My sincerely,
　　                                                                                                                Li Ming
　　4分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：作文內(nèi)容很豐富，但是你的表達(dá)能力還有待提高，而且要注意書信的寫作格式，以及大小寫的問(wèn)題。

　　?第五篇
　　Dear teacher,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your help to improve my English. If it had not been for your assistance in the respect of English writing, I fear that I would have been so outstanding achievement.
　　Every one agrees that it was you who are kindness and duty.It seems that you don’t feel tired forever. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                         Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                                Li Ming
　　修改意見：
　　Dear teacher,
　　I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for your help to improve my English. If it had not been for your assistance in the respect of English writing(in 后面應(yīng)該加動(dòng)名詞，此外，respect 是尊敬的意思，用詞不當(dāng)), I fear that I would have been so outstanding achievement.(這句話是虛擬語(yǔ)氣，意思是如果不是你的幫助，我恐怕將會(huì)…)
　　Every one agrees that it was you who are kindness and duty(it was…who…是個(gè)強(qiáng)調(diào)句，這句話的意思是每個(gè)人都說(shuō)是你…例如幫助我)It seems that you don’t feel tired forever. Again, I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.
　　                                                                                                      Yours sincerely,
　　                                                                                                             Li Ming
　　2分
　　微點(diǎn)評(píng)：英語(yǔ)的句號(hào)是.你的英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)比較薄弱，建議你多看看英語(yǔ)范文，背一些模版。